I like structure. In fact, I crave it and feel uncomfortable in its absence. Not like sand in
your sneakers uncomfortable. Like an army of fire ants crawling up your legs
uncomfortable. It’s why jazz, with its offbeat rhythms, gives me vertigo, and why
haphazard picture arrangements send me reaching for my inhaler.
As you might imagine, early on in my publishing journey, this unhealthy dose of
perfectionism often hijacked my writing process…until I learned how to harness the
power of structure. Although it seems paradoxical, a strong structure unleashes my
creativity; it allows me the mental space to focus my creative energy on the writing and
the freedom to experiment with words.
This is one of the reasons poetic writing, especially rhyming, appeals to me. It inherently
provides that framework through meter and rhyme. However, it’s far from the only way
to create structure; sometimes a simple refrain or parallel beginning element is enough
to provide the structure I need. Many popular works of fiction have had great success
using this technique (If You Give a Mouse a Cookie, Goodnight Moon, Mama Do You
Love Me? for example), but it can work equally well for nonfiction.
That concept propelled the process in writing my debut, THE NEST THAT WREN BUILT (Candlewick 2020). I had been intrigued by the Carolina Wrens’ habit of building nests in various containers in my garage - an upside-down bike helmet, an Amazon box, the brim of a garden hat - as well as the process and materials they used in the construction (snakeskin?!). While researching, the title popped in my head, unearthed from a childhood memory of reading “The House That Jack Built,” no doubt. The concept was a natural fit for my subject and purpose; however, instead of following the original, unrhymed cumulative approach, I used only the beginning and ending elements to build a spare, poetic framework that echoed the natural rhythms and cycle of the wrens’ work and created a pleasing read-aloud.
Using this structure created a sandbox in which I could play with words, changing and rearranging until they fit and felt just right, layering each verse with poetic elements like alliteration and assonance, and embedding both the scientific language and the context young readers would need to understand it. This approach also paved the way for companion titles, THE LODGE THAT BEAVER BUILT (2022) and THE DEN THAT OCTOPUS BUILT (2024), and I had just as much fun playing in the word sandbox with them!
A peek into my “sandbox” with the first verse of THE DEN THAT OCTOPUS BUILT:
The actual first page, gorgeously illustrated by Anne Hunter:
Tips for Building Your Sandbox
1. Be strategic. Choose a structure purposefully. For example, some elements,
such as refrains or parallel structures can create a particular cadence, which can
echo a theme or evoke a mood. Experiment with different options until you find
one that reflects or enhances your subject in some way.
2. Think outside the (sand) box. When it comes to seeking a structure, don’t
overlook a potential source. Classic books, nursery rhymes, and songs may
provide inspiration, but so could famous speeches, poems, or lines from classic
literature (even Shakespeare!).
3. Make it your own. If you take your cue from a well-known source, work to make
it your own. For example, a book about a biome, modeled after the classic Over
in the Meadow, might be Deep in the Rainforest or Out on the Prairie. Similarly,
All around the Mulberry Bush could inspire Up and Down the Sycamore Tree.
4. Don’t be afraid to use something that’s already been done. As with The Nest
That Wren Built, there are many other books, especially in the last few years, that
took inspiration from The House That Jack Built (See the list below for just a
few.), but they are all unique and work beautifully.
I hope you can take away a tiny grain of inspiration from the mentor texts below. See
you in the sandbox!
A Sampling of Books With Strong Structures
A Nest is Noisy, An Egg is Quiet, A Rock is Lively by Dianna Hutts Aston
Before he was a Jazz Giant: A Song of John Coltrane, by Carole Boston Weatherford and
Sean Qualls
Before She Was Harriet, by Lesa Cline-Ransome and James Ransome
Mojave by Diane Siebert and Wendell Minor (Mask Poem…”I am…”)
On a Snow-Melting Day, by Buffy Silverman
Over and Under the Snow by Kate Messner and Christopher Silas Neal
The Gabi That Girma Wore by Fasika Adefris, Sara Holly Ackerman, and Netsanet Tesfay
The Sea Knows by Alice McGinty, Alan Havis, and Stephanie Laberis
This is the Sunflower by Lola Schaefer and Donald Crews
Water Can Be, A Rock Can Be, A Leaf Can Be by Laura Purdie Salas and Violeta Dabija
Water is Water by Miranda Paul and Jason Chin
Welcome to the Green House by Jane Yolen and Laura Regan
Where Once There Was a Wood by Denise Fleming
Whoo-Ku Haiku by Maria Gianferrari and Jonathan Voss

Thanks for this encouraging post with helpful examples, Randi! I'm a fan of your books highlighting nature's creatures.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Robin!
DeleteThank you for the excellent tips for building my sandbox.
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading, Sue!
DeleteGreat tips for playing around inside - and outside - the box. What a great list of mentor texts, too!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Sue!
DeleteThank you for this helpful information and list of mentor texts I'm excited to check out (Laura Purdie Salas' mentor text stands out to me today because I recently bought her workbook about the Educational Market and am working my way through it!)
ReplyDeleteYou’ll love her books, Heather!
DeleteOh Randi, Wow...good thing there was a mistake in our room assignments at WOW! I am the least organized structured, most mumbled jumbled, person you could even meet. I'm the one who has to have pictures hanging on the wall this way and that. I cringe at a perfect straight line of the same size frames and love going barefoot in the grass and squishy mud! But your suggestions for structuring picture books and your mentor texts are a perfect match for me. Thanks Randi
ReplyDeleteHa! Yes, a happy accident, Mona! Of course I knew it was you. 🥰
DeleteI totally understand! Though I deal with narratives, I'm always trying to find a structure that will enhance the story. Super post!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Beth! I need to pick your brain about pb bios!
DeleteLove this metaphor of building a sandbox, Randi! Thanks for showing your own example from note card to poetic version. Love all these books of yours!
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading, Kathy!
DeleteYour poetic structures work so beautifully--paying homage to This is the House that Jack Built but building something entirely new.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Annette!
DeleteLoved this peek into your sandbox, Randi! I've been a fan ever since WOW. Thank you for sharing your suggestions for structuring PBs and your awesome mentor text list!
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading, Charlotte!
DeleteThanks for giving us a peek into your sandbox, Randi!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Michelle!
DeleteThere are so many take-aways from this post! You have several great ideas I can use. I identify with you on the perfectionism. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteThank you Randi for your post. These books are lovely.
ReplyDeleteThis post is timely since I am working on a draft with the structure of THE HOUSE THAT JACK BUILT. I love these additional mentor texts!
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